How are you, Mayleen!

2017-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: Opinion: Why is money the most common way of judging success? Limit your answer to 4 or 5 sentences only. ^-^ In my opinion, earning much money definitely shouldn’t be success. Money can play an important role in life, but it has little to do with success. If earning much money is success, what do you think that someone have cheated on a person and as a result, he earned much money. I think it is important how to earn money and how to use it.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Mr. [Name]!^-^

Happy Monday!


Thank you so much for answering your homework.

You did a good job here. I totally agree with your opinion.

I will talk to you again on Wednesday. See you then!

Good night! :)


...Teacher Mayleen...


In my opinion, earning much money definitely shouldn’t be success.

>> In my opinion, earning much money shouldn’t be the basis of success.


Money can play an important role in life, but it has little to do with success.

>> Money plays an important role in life, but it has little to do with success.


If earning much money is success, what do you think that someone have cheated on a person and as a result, he earned much money.

>> If earning much money means success, what do you think about people who\'ve cheater others just to gain a lot of money?


I think it is important how to earn money and how to use it.

>> I think that how you earn and how you use money are important.

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