How are you, Mayleen!

2017-09-14 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: Writing Exercise: The brain is an organ that serves as the center of the nervous system. It is one of the most complex and magnificent organs in the human body. What is the most amazing thing about the brain? Answer in not more than 5 sentences.^-^ I was a science teacher some years ago, so I know almost perfectly what brains to do. Brains are too important to explain their’s role. Brains play how significant a role in our body such as memory, reasoning, control of metabolism and nervous system, breathing, heartbeat, action and reaction, etc... If the small part of Brains are hurted, we would be a handicapped person or reached to death.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Jason! ^^ Happy Thursday! (^___^)/

Thank you for doing your homework though we didn\'t have the class yesterday.

We can talk about this in class if you want to.

Anyway, you did a job and I\'ve read your composition well.

See you later in class!^^

_T. Mayleen :)

I was a science teacher some years ago, so I know almost perfectly what brains to do.

>> I was once a science teacher so I know almost all functions of the brain.

Brains are too important to explain their’s role.

>> The brain is too complicated to explain.

Brains play how significant a role in our body such as memory, reasoning, control of metabolism and nervous system, breathing, heartbeat, action and reaction, etc...

>> The brain plays a significant role in the body such as memory, reasoning, control of metabolism and nervous system, breathing, heartbeat, action and reaction, etc.

If the small part of Brains are hurted, we would be a handicapped person or reached to death.

>> If even a small part of the brain gets damaged or hurt, we could die or be handicapped for the rest of our life.

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