How are you, Mayleen!

2017-09-21 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: Creative Writing: Everyone feels a certain way about risk. Some are risk-oriented, others are risk-averse. What is your definition of "risk"? Answer in not more than 5 sentences. I think that peoples are almost risk-oriented in youth, there are why they are young and are filled with courage and can make a challenges as well. Besides, if they are failed their challenges, they have the time to recover their faults. But they are more older, they are changing more risk-averse because of opposite reason being described above.

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Good afternoon, Mr. [Name]!^-^ Happy Thursday!


We may still weigh the costs and benefits of doing something risky, seeing someone we know taking the risk can be a powerful inducement to try it ourselves.
We take risks because we want to gain from it one way or another, and think experience is a good measure of its actual risk.

Thank you for this composition.^^


_T. Mayleen :)


I think that peoples are almost risk-oriented in youth, there are why they are young and are filled with courage and can make a challenges as well.

>> I think that the younger generation is more risk-oriented because they\'re young and filled with courage to face challenges.


Besides, if they are failed their challenges, they have the time to recover their faults.

>> Besides, if ever they\'d fail a challenge, they would have plenty of time to recover.


But they are more older, they are changing more risk-averse because of opposite reason being described above.

>> But for the older generation, they become risk-averse as oppose to the reasons above.

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