How are you, Mayleen!

2017-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: Writing Exercise: What would the world be like if everyone had access to a good education? Answer in not more than 5 sentences. ^.~ If everyone had access to a good education,I think that the world would definitely be a better world to live in, but all things will not improve as much as we think. There will still be poverty in the world and crime will be more clever. Rather, happiness index may decrease and suiside rates may increase. Every society has its own relative sense of deprivation.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Mr. [Name]! ^.^

It\'s a Peppy Thursday!

Thank you for doing your homework.

I have read it well and I must say you have a point.

Access to good education isn\'t really the answer to having a better life.

Anyway, I will talk to you again tomorrow.^^ Enjoy the rest of the day!

_T. Mayleen :)

If everyone had access to a good education,I think that the world would definitely be a better world to live in, but all things will not improve as much as we think.
>> If everyone had access to a good education,I think that the world would definitely be a better place to live in, but things will not improve as much as we think.

There will still be poverty in the world and crime will be more clever.
>> There will still be poverty in the world and criminals will be more clever.

Rather, happiness index may decrease and suiside rates may increase.
>> CORRECT!

Every society has its own relative sense of deprivation.

>> CORRECT!

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