How are you,Mayleen!

2017-11-06 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: You are asked to select one or two objects to represent life at the beginning of the 21st century. The idea is to help future generations better understand how we lived and what major events affected us. What objects would your choose and why? In the 21st century, the cold war era ended and technological revolution are rapidly advancing. I think that the use of smartphones has had the most influence on our lifestyles. The search function for smartphones changed the student’s educational frame itself. School classes are now transformed into a form of creativity growing rather than knowledge transfer.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Mr. [Name]! ^^,) Happy Monday!

Thank you so much for this.^^

I\'ve read your composition well.

However, you did mention objects that best represent the 21st century.

We\'ll just talk about it in class then.

Have a good night!

_T. Mayleen :)

In the 21st century, the cold war era ended and technological revolution are rapidly advancing.

>>> In the 21st century, the cold war era ended and technological revolution is rapidly advancing.

I think that the use of smartphones has had the most influence on our lifestyles.

>>> Correct!

The search function for smartphones changed the student’s educational frame itself.

>>> The browsing function for smartphones changed students\' educational perspective.

School classes are now transformed into a form of creativity growing rather than knowledge transfer.

>>> School classes are now transformed from knowledge transfer to a creativity building.

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