How are you, Mayleen!

2017-11-28 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

학생이 쓴 원문

HOMEWORK: Writing Exercise: BEHAVIOR Choose one (1) question and answer in not more than five (5) sentences.^-^ 1. Does economic status affect people's behavior? 2. What behavior do you find unacceptable? 3. Can music influence your behavior? 1. Does economic status affect people's behavior? In a young age, people act fairly, and the world looks fair, and their behavior is unaffected by the economic status, regardless of the economic status. However, as they grow older, they become a lot of restrictions depending on economic conditions. This is a fact that has never changed historically, and it is my experience.

강사 첨삭

Aging brings wisdom. People definitely do get wiser as they get older. This is because life teaches lessons to people in all aspects of life -- relationships, jobs, and economics in particular. Experience is a teacher to all, and sometimes that experience comes in the form of hard-learned lessons. The young people simply do not have this kind of wisdom. [debate.org]


Thank you for doing your homework, MR. SON!^^.)

_Teacher Mayleen :)


In a young age, people act fairly, and the world looks fair, and their behavior is unaffected by the economic status, regardless of the economic status.

>>> In their youth, people act fairly, and the world looks fair, and their behavior is unaffected by their economic status.

However, as they grow older, they become a lot of restrictions depending on economic conditions.

>>> However, as they grow older, a lot of restrictions arise depending on their economic condition.

This is a fact that has never changed historically, and it is my experience.

>>> This is a fact that has never changed through history, and it is based from my experience.

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