How are you, Mayleen!

2017-11-30 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: Writing Exercise: Apart from the obvious financial problem what other consequences can occur as a result of excessive gambling? Answer in not more than 5 sentences.^-^ Firstly, excessive gambling can undermine the work ethic and create a get rich quick. Secondly, excessive gambling also leads to ruin families and ruin the future of the nation. With my experience, excessive gambling is the devil that leads us to ruin our society.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Mr. [Name]! ^-^

Thank you for doing your homework.

I have read it well and I totally agree that excessive gambling would only lead to one\'s destruction.

I will talk to you again tomorrow.^^ Enjoy the rest of the day!

_T. Mayleen :)

Firstly, excessive gambling can undermine the work ethic and create a get rich quick.
>>> Firstly, excessive gambling can undermine one\'s work ethic believing that becoming rich in a quick way is better.

Secondly, excessive gambling also leads to ruin families and ruin the future of the nation.
>>> Secondly, excessive gambling also leads to breaking families apart and ruining the future of their children.

With my experience, excessive gambling is the devil that leads us to ruin our society.

>>> Based on my experience, excessive gambling is the devil that could lead to the destruction of our society.

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