How are you, Mayleen!

Good evening, Mr. [Name]! ^^,)

Happy Thursday!

Thank you for this composition. I\'ve read it well.

I also made some modification for you to review later on.

We can talk about this in class if you want to.

See you then again tomorrow. :)

Have a good night!

_T. Mayleen :)

Enjoying violent video games is naturally linked to violent incidents.

>>> Correct!
Most juvenile delinquency attempts to imitate violent video games and learn how to play criminal technique.

>>> Most juvenile delinquents attempt to imitate violent video games and learn how to do criminal/illegal acts.
Although the game industry has a lot of economic benefits, it has the side effect to harming young people.

>>> Although the game industry has a lot of economic benefits, the disadvantage is its bad influence to young people.

OR:

>>> Although the game industry has a lot of economic benefits, the disadvantage is its bad influence to the younger generation.