How are you,Mayleen! I'm Son.

2017-11-14 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: The blood provides your body with the oxygen and nutrients it needs. It also carries away waste. Your HEART is sort of like a pump, or two pumps in one. The right side of your heart receives blood from the body and pumps it to the lungs. Heart disease is the number one cause of death in the Western world. QUESTION: What can you do to look after your heart? I always exercise regularly to protect my heart, it's why the regular exercise is the best way to protect heart that pump the blood and to suck it up. And I try to have a healthy diet that keeps my blood clean,the sticky blood is the first cause of heart disease.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Mr. [Name]! ^^,)

A happy Tuesday to you!


Thank you for answering your homework.

I totally agree that exercising regularly is important to keep the heart healthy.

Anyway, I will talk to you again tomorrow.^^

Enjoy the rest of the day!


_T. Mayleen :)


I always exercise regularly to protect my heart, it\'s why the regular exercise is the best way to protect heart that pump the blood and to suck it up.

>>> I exercise regularly to protect my heart, that\'s why exercising is the best way to keep our hearts pumping.
And I try to have a healthy diet that keeps my blood clean,the sticky blood is the first cause of heart disease.

>>> I also try to have a healthy diet to keep my blood toxin-free because the consistency of the blood could lead to heart diseases.

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