how are you teacher MAYLEEN. I am [Name] son

2016-08-23 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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How would the world be different if everyone on the planet enjoyed the same rights and no discrimination existed? I think that everyone on the planet would have peace with one word. and we live better world than present one. this world is fiilled with love and pleasure. It is not religious conflicts and refugees all over the world. everyone on the planet live happily in hometown.

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Hello, Mr. [Name]!   Thank you for accomplishing your homework. You had great ideas but they\'re far from reality. Wars and religious conflicts are already happening in some parts of the planet. If only peace would really reign.. :(   I have made some modification for you to review later on. See you tomorrow! ^_^   _Teacher Mayleen_   I think that everyone on the planet would have peace with one word. and we live better world than present one. >> If that happens, I think everyone on this planet would have peace and it\'d be abetter place to live in than today. this world is fiilled with love and pleasure. >> This world would be filled with love and happiness.It is not religious conflicts and refugees all over the world. >> There will be no conflicts on religions and wars all ove the world.everyone on the planet live happily in hometown. >> Everyone would live happily.

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