How can access to devices like smartphones be made secured?

2019-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I think repeated tests are the best way to keep individual information. when i read the article about the artificial finger frinters, the device only storage a part of finger frinters instead of full. before releasing the new device, If they tried to test several times like secure from users position, They would supplement secure problems. actually, I consider The solutions and supplement are better than developing new system for the secure. In view of past history, the new systems seems to have little problems about the secure. I hope the manufactural to try to several time test to keep information rather than only seeking their sales income. I have confidence that the reliable test result will make them to be a leader of industries.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] [이름]. Thank you once again for this. If companies would be able to come up with secure apps or programs to completely ensure customer\'s secured privacy, it would be quite revolutionary.

- T. Beth

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I think repeated tests are the best way to keep individual information.

>>>  CORRECT.
>>> OR:
I think repeated testing is the best way to keep individual information secured.       

when i read the article about the artificial finger frinters, the device only storage a part of finger frinters instead of full.

>>>  When I read the article about the artificial fingerprints, the device only store a part of fingerprints instead of full.   

before releasing the new device, If they tried to test several times like secure from users position, They would supplement secure problems.

>>>  Before releasing the new device, if they tried to test security several times, they would compensate for security problems.   

actually, I consider The solutions and supplement are better than developing new system for the secure.

>>>  Actually, I consider  the solutions and supplementary better than developing new system for security.   

In view of past history, the new systems seems to have little problems about the secure.

>>> Looking at the past history, the new systems seems to have little problems about security.     

I hope the manufactural to try to several time test to keep information rather than only seeking their sales income.

>>>  I hope for the manufacturers to try to test several time in order to keep information safe rather than only seeking for more profit.   

I have confidence that the reliable test result will make them to be a leader of industries.

>>>  I have confidence that the reliable test result will make them leaders in the industry.   


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