How can be the problem of corruption be reduced?
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The problem of corruption have issued in many countries for a long time, and my country is also issued that problem recently.
I think that the problem of corruption can\'t be solved absolutely because humans always have insatiable desires.
Humans want to have something constantly. So, they always have made problems of corruption.
However, we have to interest in the problem of corruption. we have to watch and concern that problem.
If we are not interested in that problem, we will lose the chance to change.
In Korea, it have big politics scandal in 2016. But, we fight political power, and we achieved our right through democracy.
If we are indifferent to the problem of corruption, we can\'t do anything.
The problem of corruption can\'t be solved absolutely. Nevertheless, we constantly watch the problem for our right.
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Hi Se [이름].
Here are the corrections.
The problem of corruption have issued in many countries for a long time, and my country is also issued that problem recently.
>>The problem of corruption have issued in many countries for a long time, including Korea recently.
I think that the problem of corruption can\'t be solved absolutely because humans always have insatiable desires.
>>Correct!
Humans want to have something constantly. So, they always have made problems of corruption. However, we have to interest in the problem of corruption. we have to watch and concern that problem.
>>Humans want to have something constantly. So, they always have made problems of corruption. However, we have to be interested in the problem of corruption. We have to be watchful and be concerned on that problem.
If we are not interested in that problem, we will lose the chance to change. In Korea, it have big politics scandal in 2016. But, we fight political power, and we achieved our right through democracy.
>>If we are not interested in that problem, we will lose the chance to change. In Korea, there was big politics scandals in 2016. But, we fought our political power, and we achieved our right through democracy.
If we are indifferent to the problem of corruption, we can\'t do anything. The problem of corruption can\'t be solved absolutely. Nevertheless, we constantly watch the problem for our right.
>>Correct!
Nevertheless, we constantly watch the problem for our right.
>>Nevertheless, we constantly watch the problem of our rights.
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