How can faith help people during hard times?
학생이 쓴 원문
All people suffer from many problems. The shapes of problems are different according to people. I think money, visions, careers, and relationships are the main points that they discourage. They encompass our mind and thinking. So, we used to consider that we are failed and lose our\'s confidence. But, Christians know that They can never fill our empty mind. Only God can do it. I am sure hard times like that are also God\'s working. Because He is always good. I think that believing His planning, timing and even method are faith. Through this hard times, our faith are grew up and we will experience God\'s working. When we believe his faithful, if the hard time circumstances are not changed, but we can overcome that time and feel relieved. This faith raise our up and proceed again.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ji[이름], I truly appreciate your long and heartfelt response. I love how deeply you express yourself. You’re not just practicing English, you’re also sharing your faith, values, and reflections on life. That makes your writing very meaningful and inspiring to read. Even though some grammar corrections were needed, the strength of your writing is in your sincerity and depth of thought. It’s wonderful to see how you can put your personal beliefs into words in another language. That shows both courage and passion. Keep writing long and expressive answers like this. They not only improve your English but also show your unique perspective and voice. I’m proud of your effort and heart in this work!
~ T. Lia
All people suffer from many problems.
>> CORRECT
The shapes of problems are different according to people.
>> The types of problems are different for each person.
I think money, visions, careers, and relationships are the main points that they discourage.
>> I think money, visions, careers, and relationships are the main things that discourage people.
They encompass our mind and thinking.
>> They occupy our mind and thoughts.
So, we used to consider that we are failed and lose our\'s confidence.
>> So, we tend to think that we have failed and lose our confidence.
But, Christians know that They can never fill our empty mind.
>> But Christians know that these things can never fill our empty minds.
Only God can do it.
>> CORRECT
I am sure hard times like that are also God\'s working.
>> I am sure hard times like that are also God’s work.
Because He is always good
>> CORRECT
I think that believing His planning, timing and even method are faith.
>> I think that believing in His plan, His timing, and even His methods is faith.
Through this hard times, our faith are grew up and we will experience God\'s working.
>> Through these hard times, our faith grows, and we experience God’s work.
When we believe his faithful, if the hard time circumstances are not changed, but we can overcome that time and feel relieved.
>> When we believe in His faithfulness, even if the circumstances do not change, we can overcome that time and feel relieved.
This faith raise our up and proceed again.
>> This faith lifts us up and helps us move forward again.
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