How can free time activities benefit both mental and physical health?

2024-10-25 · 첨삭 강사 Ryka

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I usually play the game in leisure time. It could reduce many stresses that I recieved. In other words, enjoying leisure is good for mental health. Also, if I exercise in free time, I can get many physical benefit.

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~~Teacher Ryka^^

I usually play the game in leisure time. It could reduce many stresses that I recieved.
>> I usually play games in my leisure time, which helps reduce much of the stress I experience.

In other words, enjoying leisure is good for mental health.
>> In other words, enjoying leisure activities is good for mental health. 

Also, if I exercise in free time, I can get many physical benefit.
>> Additionally, if I exercise in my free time, I gain many physical benefits.

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