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학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name],
I want to make a composition for my free subject. Today, I am going to write a short story about contacting tools.
Long long time ago, I received a message from the telegraph. if you have any something to congraturate to someone, you can send the telegraph in post office, it is faster tool than letter. but it was a limited character counter and it was very expensive tool than letter.
These days we have a mobil phone. it is possible to connect someone who you want to call. When I was young, I could not imagine this situation. but it is actual fact.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]~ I would accept your composition and correct them as well. Thank you! See you in class!
Here are your corrections:
Dear [Name],
I want to make a composition for my free subject.
I want to make a composition for my free subject.
>> I want to make a composition of free subject.
Today, I am going to write a short story about contacting tools.
>> Today, I am going to write a short story about communication tools.
>> A long time ago, I receive messages from the telegraph.
if you have any something to congraturate to someone, you can send the telegraph in post office,
>> If you want to congratulate someone, you can send your telegraph at the post office.
it is faster tool than letter.
>> It was a faster tool than letter.
but it was a limited character counter and it was very expensive tool than letter.
>> But, you only have limited characters that can be sent and it was more expensive than letter.
>> These days, we have mobile phones.
it is possible to connect someone who you want to call.
>> It is now possible to connect to anyone you want to call.
When I was young, I could not imagine this situation. but it is actual fact.
>> When I was young, I didn\'t imagine about this.
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