How can joining an organization help build a person positively?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think joining an organization can be a person positively already.
It needs lots confidence and courage to join because all people who is joining an organization don\'t know each other.
And they will be got responsibility each other because they are a team and this is not competition.
Some passive person is also in charge of some work in their team although how small is.
All people are able to run for their team and then they will be changed very active and positive.
So, passive person will become a positive person more and more.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. I agree, it\'s a good way to socialize.
- T. Beth
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I think joining an organization can be a person positively already.>>> I think joining an organization can affect a person positively.
It needs lots confidence and courage to join because all people who is joining an organization don\'t know each other.
>>> It needs lots of confidence and courage to join because all people who are joining an organization don\'t know each other.
And they will be got responsibility each other because they are a team and this is not competition.
>>> And they will have responsibility on each other because they are a team and this is not a competition.
Some passive person is also in charge of some work in their team although how small is.
>>> Some passive people are also in charge of some work in their team no matter how small it is.
All people are able to run for their team and then they will be changed very active and positive.
>>> All people are able to run for their team and then they will be changed very actively and positively.
So, passive person will become a positive person more and more.
>>> So, a passive person will become a positive person more and more.
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