How can parents handle their child's cell phone and social media use appropriately

2018-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Well Today's homework is a little bit difficult for me because I have no child yet. But I'll do my best:) When I was child playing outside with friends is a big pleasure. But children who live these days are too much concentrate about their cell phone. They play mobile game using their cell phone and also they gain too many infomations from social media in their cell phone. For handle children effectively, parents must have attention on their child's life and preference. They have to exchang their opinion each other without judgement. If some bad information are finded parent have to tell directily to their children. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Jane!


I would also like to thank you for answering the question.

Though it\'s hard for you, you still made an effort.

I appreciate that.

You have good ideas to share. Keep your ideas coming. ^^


_Teacher Dianne ^_^


Well Today\'s homework is a little bit difficult for me because I have no child yet.
But I\'ll do my best:)
>>
Well, today\'s homework is a little bit difficult for me because I have no child yet, but I\'ll do my best. :) 

When I was child playing outside with friends is a big pleasure.

>> When I was a child, playing outside with my friends was a big pleasure.
 But children who live these days are too much concentrate about their cell phone.

>> But children nowadays are too much concentrated about their cell phone.
 They play mobile game using their cell phone and also they gain too many infomations from social media in their cell phone.

>> They play mobile games using their cell phone and also they gain too much information from social media in their cell phone.
 For handle children effectively, parents must have attention on their child\'s life and preference. 

>> To handle children effectively, parents must pay attention to their children\'s lives and preferences. 
 They have to exchang their opinion each other without judgement.

>> They have to exchange their opinions with each other without judgment.
 If some bad information are finded parent have to tell directily to their children.

>> If parents found out some bad information about their children they should tell it directly to their children.

OR:

>> If their children made a mistake parents should tell about it directly to their children.

 Thank you.

>> correct

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