How can part-time jobs during high school or college provide valuable opportunities for gaining work
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Many students think about working is better than studying but If they have a part-time job, absolutely change their mind. It shows working is not easy. Usually, most of peoples look for a part time jobs for get money that to buy something or to live. Of course, they have a variety of purposes but It\'s certain to do it for money. In fact, most of college students need more money because they have a lot of responsibility and are the beginning of one’s independence. We need a lot of money for living. Like for the food, the house and the school costs. And they realize how hard it is to get money when they have a part -time jobs. Furthermore, as they work part-time jobs, they feel the necessity of stable job because they realize that part-time job is unable to do by a long run. Actually, that\'s a reason why many people struggle to get stable jobs.
강사 첨삭
Hi Sarah! Thank you for sharing your opinion about getting part-time jobs as a student. Yes, it is difficult and challenging and you are right. For some people it is a necessity and they have no choice but to get a job. Great job! See you in class later!^^
~~ Teacher Ryka^^
>> Many students think that working is better than studying, but once they get a part-time job they\'d absolutely change their mind.
It shows working is not easy.
>> It shows that working is not easy.
Usually, most of peoples look for a part time jobs for get money that to buy something or to live.
>> Usually, most people look for part-time jobs to earn money and buy things they want or for them to live.
Of course, they have a variety of purposes but It\'s certain to do it for money.
>> Of course they have various reasons but it\'s certainly all for money.
In fact, most of college students need more money because they have a lot of responsibility and are the beginning of one’s independence.
>> In fact, most college students need more money because they have a lot of responsibilities and they\'re in the beginning of becoming independent.
We need a lot of money for living.
>> CORRECT
Like for the food, the house and the school costs.
>> Like for food, rent and school fees.
And they realize how hard it is to get money when they have a part -time jobs.
>> And they start to realize how difficult it is to earn money when they get a part-time job.
Furthermore, as they work part-time jobs, they feel the necessity of stable job because they realize that part-time job is unable to do by a long run.
>> Furthermore, as they\'re working in part-time job, they\'d feel the necessity of finding a stable job because they\'d realize that part-time jobs aren\'t good in the long run.
Actually, that\'s a reason why many people struggle to get stable jobs.
>> Actually, that\'s one reason why many people struggle to get stable jobs.
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