How can people maintain good health?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my country people love to ride a bike regardless of age.So they usually have participated in riding a bicycle club. It’s a chance for them to stay healthy and mingle with their peers. Bicycle encourage they gather to have fun as well as move their bones and muscle. It make for them to improve their health conditions.
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In my country people love to ride a bike regardless of age.
>> In my country, people love to ride a bike regardless of the age.
So they usually have participated in riding a bicycle club.
>> Correct!
It’s a chance for them to stay healthy and mingle with their peers.
>> Correct!
Bicycle encourage they gather to have fun as well as move their bones and muscle.
>> Riding a bicycle encourages the people to gather and have fun as well as move their bones and muscles.
It make for them to improve their health conditions.
>> It helps them to improve their health conditions.
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