How can self-introduction help build a relationship?

2023-07-28 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

I tend to introduce myself to the people when meet them for the first time. I think that the other person opens their mind and introduces themselves too. If we have a conversation, we can get to know each other more and get closer. and we can also We also build trust in each other by talking to each other. Above all, I think it is important to introduce yourself to the other person in a realistic way without lying. I have been meeting many people around me and I getting along well with them. Because when I meet them, I greet them first and talk to them. And I always have positive conversations with people when I meet them.

강사 첨삭

I can say that you are a friendly person, Jullia. No wonder you can build a good conversation during the first meeting.
-Faith-
I tend to introduce myself to the people when meet them for the first time.
>> I tend to introduce myself to people I meet for the first time.
I think that the other person opens their mind and introduces themselves too.
>> I think that the other person opens their mind and introduces themselves, too.
If we have a conversation, we can get to know each other more and get closer.
>> CORRECT
and we can also We also build trust in each other by talking to each other.
>> Also, we can build trust in each other by talking to each other.
OR Also, we can build trust in each other by having a conversation.
Above all, I think it is important to introduce yourself to the other person in a realistic way without lying.
>> CORRECT
OR Most importantly, it is important to introduce oneself to others honestly.
I have been meeting many people around me and I getting along well with them. 
Because when I meet them, I greet them first and talk to them.
>> I have been meeting many people around me and getting along well with them because when I meet them, I greet them first and talk to them.
And I always have positive conversations with people when I meet them.
>> I always have positive conversations with people I meet.

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