How can societies promote a culture of care and support for vulnerable populations?

2023-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Hanna

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Actually we have a health and welfare department in Korea. It makes a budget for vulnerable class in public. It\'s not enough. Still they need lots of money and concern. Local community should make a plan to help that population and many people donate to care them.

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-Hanna ^^

Actually we have a health and welfare department in Korea.

>>Actually, we have a health and welfare department in Korea.

It makes a budget for vulnerable class in public.

>>It provides a budget for the vulnerable classes in the public.

It\'s not enough.

>>Correct.

Still they need lots of money and concern.

>>They still need a lot of care and concerns.

Local community should make a plan to help that population and many people donate to care them.

>>The local community should make a plan to assist this population, and many people can donate to care for them.

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