How can stress be good or helpful to us?

2021-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Angelica

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My life impetus is fear about being poor. When I was a kid, my parents were poor. It was hard time. I couldn\'t have big dream. My parents couldn\'t support me as much as I wanted. Now, I must take care of my children. I want to support my children as much as they want. Stress of being poor gives me lots of pressure and energy for keeping living well.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]ny, 
Thank you for submitting your homework. It\'s touching to read about how much you love your kids, you\'re a good dad. 
Take care and see you in class! :) 
Regards, 
T. Angelica 
My life impetus is fear about being poor. 
>>My life impetus is the fear of being poor. 
When I was a kid, my parents were poor. 
>> CORRECT
It was hard time. 
>> It was a hard time. 
I couldn\'t have big dream. 
>> I couldn\'t have a big dream 
OR >> I couldn\'t have big dreams 
My parents couldn\'t support me as much as I wanted. 
>>CORRECT 
Now, I must take care of my children. 
>> CORRECT 
I want to support my children as much as they want. 
>> CORRECT 
OR >> I want to support my children as much as they want me to. 
Stress of being poor gives me lots of pressure and energy for keeping living well.
>> The stress of being poor gives me lots of pressure and energy to keep living well. 
OR >> Wanting to give my kids a better life drives me to work harder and to keep living well. 

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