How can the government improve public transport in your city?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the goverment imporve public transport by increasing the fare of each transport.
Bus drivers often go on strike recently because they should do overtime work frequently even though they get low salaries.
I think it can be solved if they get salaries enough by increasing the ticket prices.
We can also improve a quality of each subway\'s seat by increasing the fare.
My japanese friend who visited here last week said the seats of subways are inconvenient here compared to Japan, and I agree with her opinion.
We can improve seats by increasing the ticket prices.
In conclusion, we can improve public transportation by increasing the fare of each transport.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Good job sharing specific ideas to improve public transportation! I like how you included examples and even your friend’s opinion to support your thoughts. Just watch small grammar points, like “imporve → improve” and subject-verb agreement. Keep practicing, your writing is becoming clear and persuasive!
~Teacher Polly
I think the goverment imporve public transport by increasing the fare of each transport.
>>I think the government can improve public transportation by increasing the fare for each type of transport.
Bus drivers often go on strike recently because they should do overtime work frequently even though they get low salaries.
>>Recently, bus drivers often go on strike because they have to work overtime frequently, even though their salaries are low.
I think it can be solved if they get salaries enough by increasing the ticket prices.
>>I think it could be solved if their salaries were increased by raising ticket prices.
We can also improve a quality of each subway\'s seat by increasing the fare.
>>We could also improve the quality of subway seats by increasing the fare.
My Japanese friend who visited here last week said the seats of subways are inconvenient here compared to Japan, and I agree with her opinion.
>>My Japanese friend, who visited last week, said the subway seats here are uncomfortable compared to Japan, and I agree with her opinion.
We can improve seats by increasing the ticket prices.
>>CORRECT
In conclusion, we can improve public transportation by increasing the fare of each transport.
>>In conclusion, public transportation can be improved by increasing the fare for each type of transport.
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