how can we change welfare to help people escape generational poverty?
학생이 쓴 원문
as I think, there is no perfect policy to the welfare.
But In order not to be passed 'The rich get richer', we should be aware of making the State policy in the largest framework. furthermore important and urgent thing is individual effort to escape poverty.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Ms. [이름]!
Yes, I agree with your opinion.
As individuals, we should make effort to escape poverty.
Anyway, just seat back for now.
I will talk with you later.
-Teacher Chloe
as I think, there is no perfect policy to the welfare.
>>I think, there is no perfect policy to change welfare.But In order not to be passed \'The rich get richer\', we should be aware of making the State policy in the largest framework.
>>In order to change welfare to help people escape generational poverty, we should make a state policy.
furthermore important and urgent thing is individual effort to escape poverty.
>>Furthermore, it is important for an individual to make an effort to espcape poverty.
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