How can we disconnect from our phones to truly experience the present moment?
학생이 쓴 원문
During event like a new year celebration, we can see easily that many people don\'t enjoy the festival and they only tried to take a picture.
If they realize that enjoying is more important than recording a history, they would disconnect thier phone.
강사 첨삭
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During event like a new year celebration, we can see easily that many people don\'t enjoy the festival and they only tried to take a picture.
>> During events like New Year celebrations, it’s easy to see that many people don’t enjoy the festival; they only try to take pictures.
If they realize that enjoying is more important than recording a history, they would disconnect thier phone.
If they realized that enjoying the moment is more important than recording it, they would put their phones away.
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