How can we eradicate poverty? Is poverty a serious problem in your country?
학생이 쓴 원문
Seriously, we have two problems.
Frist young men have it.
Many people want to go to the University.
But they don\'t have enough money.
Just only one,take out a loan.
Second problem, seniors increase more than babies.
Our contry is very seriously this topic.
If I am old.Korea can\'t take care of me.
I ready to prepare it.I have to save money. haha.
강사 첨삭
Hello JO!
Well, in my country, the number of young people isn\'t the problem because there are lots of us. Haha
The problem here is employment. There are many who fail to get a good job, or some who earn just enough.
I think these are the causes of poverty here.
Here are the corrections.
Seriously, we have two problems.
>> Correct!
Frist young men have it.
>> First, young men have it.
Many people want to go to the University.
>> Correct!
But they don\'t have enough money.
>> Correct!
Just only one,take out a loan.
>> They only have one solution, applying for a loan.
Second problem, seniors increase more than babies.
>> The second problem is that seniors cit zens increased in number more than babies.
Our contry is very seriously this topic.
>> Our country is very seriously about this topic.
If I am old.Korea can\'t take care of me.
>> If I am old, Korea can\'t take care of me.
I ready to prepare it.I have to save money. haha.
>> I ready to want to prepare for it. I have to save money. Haha.
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