How can we prevent or avoid having a vice?
학생이 쓴 원문
Knowing how a vice is bad for people helps prevent doing it. People don’t know and cannot realize its seriousness before they feel. Therefore, I think the best way to prevent or avoid having a vice is people become a victim who was taken a hit by them who commit vices. If so, they could understand the other side more easily. They also think that they shouldn’t do that.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]. Thank you for this.
Knowing how a vice is bad for people helps prevent doing it.
>>> OR: Knowing that a vice is bad for people helps prevent us from doing it.
People don’t know and cannot realize its seriousness before they feel.
>>> People don’t know and cannot realize its seriousness before they experience it themselves.
Therefore, I think the best way to prevent or avoid having a vice is people become a victim who was taken a hit by them who commit vices.
>>> OR: Therefore, I think the best way to prevent or avoid having a vice is for people to become a victim who was hit badly by vices.
If so, they could understand the other side more easily.
>>> correct
They also think that they shouldn’t do that.
>>> correct
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