How can you be more mindful of your phone usage?

Recently if we don\\\'t have phone, it semms like can\\\'t live. Especially the cell phone is very useful. We can know news from the phone, can paid money, can play and can work. But sometimes we use too much. When we meet friends, we don\\\'t put down phone. We can\\\'t concentrate our conversation. I think that too much is not good. When we use phone, it is very important properly use. We need to warmly mind than machine. .

Hello Eva,

I hope this message finds you well. I would like to express my sincere appreciation for your thoughtful homework submission. Your insights on the role of phones in our daily lives are commendable, and I admire your ability to recognize both their advantages and the importance of moderation in their use.

If I may suggest, incorporating more specific examples could enhance your arguments further and provide greater clarity.

Overall, I am truly impressed with your progress, and I encourage you to keep up the excellent work. I look forward to seeing how you continue to develop your writing skills!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Recently if we don\\\'t have phone, it semms like can\\\'t live.

>>These days, if we don\'t have a phone, it seems like we can\'t live.

Especially the cell phone is very useful.

>>Cell phones are very useful.

We can know news from the phone, can paid money, can play and can work.

>>We can know the news from our phone, we can pay money, play and work.

But sometimes we use too much.

>>But sometimes we use it too much.

When we meet friends, we don\\\'t put down phone.

>>When we meet our friends, we don\'t put down our phones.

We can\\\'t concentrate our conversation.

>>We can\'t concentrate on our conversation.

I think that too much is not good.

>>I think using our phones too much isn\'t good.

When we use phone, it is very important properly use.

>>It\'s very important to use our phones properly.

We need to warmly mind than machine.

>>We need to value the mind over the machine.