How can you become happy again when you are sad?

2021-08-02 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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I just cry loudly so that I can maximize my sadness. After I cry, it feels like I pour out all my emotions. So I become calm and relaxed. Furthermore, I take a sleep so that I can refresh myself and relieve my stress. Also I give a call to my mom and talk to her all about my sadness.

강사 첨삭

Hello Christine!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I just cry loudly so that I can maximize my sadness.

>> CORRECT!

OR

>> I just cry out loud so I can let out all of my sadness.
After I cry, it feels like I pour out all my emotions.

>> After crying, it feels like I poured out all my emotions.
So I become calm and relaxed.

>> CORRECT!

OR

>> So I feel calm and relaxed.
Furthermore, I take a sleep so that I can refresh myself and relieve my stress.

>> Furthermore, I go to sleep so that I can refresh myself and relieve my stress.
Also I give a call to my mom and talk to her all about my sadness.

>> Also, I give my mom a call and talk about my sadness with her.

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