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2022-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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A collaborative mindset would make me a good fit for BAT. Juggling balls are inevitable in the global business, where everything is fast-paced – also, a high level of collaboration is required to pick a brain and learn from others. In my previous experiences at Willis Towers Watson, I received a request regarding the compensation level review for new hires regulated by the government. There was no market data, so I conducted the market survey and collaborated with the legal bodies for the regulatory review. As a result, we released the first research paper for Korea regarding such a position. Being open-minded to different perspectives, knowledge, and experience to deliver diverse product portfolios to clients is what BAT values. Therefore, I believe it is essential for the HR department to make an environment where everyone can be competitive. I am looking forward to an opportunity to be exposed to an atmosphere by openly sharing diverse information and ideas.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel!

A collaborative mindset would make me a good fit for BAT. 
>>>  correct 
Juggling balls are inevitable in the global business, where everything is fast-paced.
>>>  correct 
Also, a high level of collaboration is required to pick a brain and learn from others. 
>>> correct  
In my previous experiences at Willis Towers Watson, I received a request regarding the compensation level review for new hires regulated by the government. 
>>> correct  
There was no market data, so I conducted the market survey and collaborated with the legal bodies for the regulatory review. 
>>> correct  
As a result, we released the first research paper for Korea regarding such a position. 
>>>  correct 
Being open-minded to different perspectives, knowledge, and experience to deliver diverse product portfolios to clients is what BAT values. 
>>>  correct 
Therefore, I believe it is essential for the HR department to make an environment where everyone can be competitive. 
>>>  correct 
I am looking forward to an opportunity to be exposed to an atmosphere by openly sharing diverse information and ideas.
>>>  correct 

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