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A collaborative mindset would make me a good fit for BAT. Juggling balls are inevitable in the global business, where everything is fast-paced – also, a high level of collaboration is required to pick a brain and learn from others. In my previous experiences at Willis Towers Watson, I received a request regarding the compensation level review for new hires regulated by the government. There was no market data, so I conducted the market survey and collaborated with the legal bodies for the regulatory review. As a result, we released the first research paper for Korea regarding such a position. Being open-minded to different perspectives, knowledge, and experience to deliver diverse product portfolios to clients is what BAT values. Therefore, I believe it is essential for the HR department to make an environment where everyone can be competitive. I am looking forward to an opportunity to be exposed to an atmosphere by openly sharing diverse information and ideas.
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Thank you for this Aciel!
A collaborative mindset would make me a good fit for BAT.
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Juggling balls are inevitable in the global business, where everything is fast-paced.
>>> correct
Also, a high level of collaboration is required to pick a brain and learn from others.
>>> correct
In my previous experiences at Willis Towers Watson, I received a request regarding the compensation level review for new hires regulated by the government.
>>> correct
There was no market data, so I conducted the market survey and collaborated with the legal bodies for the regulatory review.
>>> correct
As a result, we released the first research paper for Korea regarding such a position.
>>> correct
Being open-minded to different perspectives, knowledge, and experience to deliver diverse product portfolios to clients is what BAT values.
>>> correct
Therefore, I believe it is essential for the HR department to make an environment where everyone can be competitive.
>>> correct
I am looking forward to an opportunity to be exposed to an atmosphere by openly sharing diverse information and ideas.
>>> correct
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