How can you help your community?

2015-03-06 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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I do not know how to help my community since although I live in my region with many people, I am not aware of them and I believe that my a little help will not be helpful to my community. Instead, if I narrow the meaning of community down to the laboratory in my university, I seem to be able to talk about it. There are about 30 students in the lab. Going to the school almost every day, I meet them and have a meal with them almost every day. In other words, these friends are like my another family. There are several rules to keep peaceful lab life such as being quiet, not eating foods with smell, cleaning the lab every week. I believe that complying with these rules is the best way to help my community, the lab. In addition, advising other friends about the subject we have to study can be another help. I cannot do something great for my community, but I am sure that my small help will be helpful to my community. Therefore, I will effort to improve my little community.

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Hello Miss [이름]! Thank you for sending this in. It is really important to help your community in the midst of our everyday activities. By doing our part to contribute to the community, we add people to our circle of influence and gain opportunities to build relationships with our neighbours. We also demonstrate what it means to be a good citizen. ~Kelly^^ I do not know how to help my community since although I live in my region with many people, I am not aware of them and I believe that my a little help will not be helpful to my community. >> I do not know how to help my community. Although there are many people living there, I am not familiar with them and I believe that a little help will not be helpful to my community. Instead, if I narrow the meaning of community down to the laboratory in my university, I seem to be able to talk about it.>> Instead, if I narrow the meaning of community down to the laboratory in my university, I can talk more about it.There are about 30 students in the lab. >> Correct. Going to the school almost every day, I meet them and have a meal with them almost every day. >> I meet them and have a meal with them almost everyday. In other words, these friends are like my another family. >> In other words, these friends are like my other family. There are several rules to keep peaceful lab life such as being quiet, not eating foods with smell, cleaning the lab every week. >> There are several rules to keep a peaceful lab life such as being quiet, not eating foods with smell, and cleaning the lab every week. I believe that complying with these rules is the best way to help my community, the lab. >> Correct. In addition, advising other friends about the subject we have to study can be another help. >> In addition, advising other friends about the subject we have to study is another way to help them. I cannot do something great for my community, but I am sure that my small help will be helpful to my community.>> I cannot do something great for my community, but I am sure that my small help is useful in the development of our society. Therefore, I will effort to improve my little community. >> Correct.  

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