How can you make a difference in the world in simple ways?
학생이 쓴 원문
It is so hard to make a difference in the world.
anyway, I think many people have too many greed.
If everyone reduce greed a little bit, the world will be good.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework. :)
I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.
You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^
Xoxo,
T. Christina ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
It is so hard to make a difference in the world.
>> CORRECT!
anyway, I think many people have too many greed.
>> Anyway, I think many people have too much greed.
If everyone reduce greed a little bit, the world will be good.
>> If everyone reduce their greed a little bit, the world will be better.
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