How careful are you in sharing information online with the use of different gadgets and applications
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Good day Sir [이름]!
Yes, we should be more aware of providing our information online. We have to make sure that we are working on a trusted and protected sites to ensure that our information won\'t leak. The use of social media has been useful nowadays but let us not emphasize the use of it in our daily lives. What a great composition!^^
~Teacher Eunice
Do I have to provide my personal information whenever I would like to join a website or application?
>> Correct!
I do not think we need to put it on the register form, especially ID number.
>> I do not think we need to put it on the register form, especially our ID numbers.
Our society have been discussing about this issues for many years.
>> Our society has been discussing about this issue for many years.
However, It does not look like going good ways.
>> However, it does not look good.
Most of websites still ask us to put our information.
>> Most of the websites still ask us to put our information.
It cause cyber crime and criminals can take our valuable information by the back door.
>> It enables cyber criminals hacked our valuable information through that back door.
If somebody takes personal information, It can use to make bank account so they can use it with criminal way.
>> If somebody takes personal information, it can be used to make bank accounts so they can use it criminally.
That\'s why I am really careful to join a website and provide my ID number.
>> That\'s why I am being careful in joining a website and providing my ID number.
I want people to be careful when they need to join a website.
>> Correct!
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