How dangerous or safe are amusement park rides or attractions?
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I think that the rides of amusement park are little bit dangerous. Although they check rides often, they can\'t change to new rides. So, I think that amusement park rides are little bit dangerous.
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I think that the rides of amusement park are little bit dangerous.
>> I think that the rides at amusement parks are a little bit dangerous.
Although they check rides often, they can\'t change to new rides.
>> Although they check the rides often, they can\'t really change the old attractions to new ones.
So, I think that amusement park rides are little bit dangerous.
>> So, I think that amusement park rides are quite dangerous.
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