How did you feel about your performance overall?

2025-04-03 · 첨삭 강사 Lia

학생이 쓴 원문

There are many things that I felt through the last golf competition. First, I felt the importance of practice. Confidence allowed me to swing well, and confidence was gained through practice. Second, it is a positive mind. One game of golf requires 18 holes. I have to take a lot of shots but all of them can not be perfect. When a bad shot comes out, I should have a mind that \"I\'ll be able to play a good shot next time.\" Finally, I must not be greedy. Once a mistake is made, if I am greedy to make up for it, I will get worse. I need the wisdom of golf management to make minimal mistakes. Overall, I was happy to find myself better than last season.

강사 첨삭

Hi David! Your response effectively conveys your reflections on the golf competition and highlights important lessons. I made some small changes to improve clarity and word choice, especially to make your ideas sound more natural in English. Your writing is well-organized and insightful nonetheless. Keep up the great work, David!


~ T. Lia


There are many things that I felt through the last golf competition.
>> I learned many things from the last golf competition.


First, I felt the importance of practice.
>> First, I realized the importance of practice.


Confidence allowed me to swing well, and confidence was gained through practice.
>> CORRECT


Second, it is a positive mind.
>> Second, having a positive mindset is essential.


One game of golf requires 18 holes.
>> A round of golf consists of 18 holes.


I have to take a lot of shots but all of them can not be perfect.
>> I have to take many shots, but not all of them can be perfect.


When a bad shot comes out, I should have a mind that \"I\'ll be able to play a good shot next time.\"
>> When I make a bad shot, I should have the mindset that \"I\'ll play a better shot next time.\"


Finally, I must not be greedy.
>> Finally, I must not be overly ambitious.


Once a mistake is made, if I am greedy to make up for it, I will get worse.
>> If I make a mistake and try too hard to compensate for it, my performance will only decline.


I need the wisdom of golf management to make minimal mistakes.
>> I need the wisdom of course management to minimize mistakes.


Overall, I was happy to find myself better than last season.
>> CORRECT

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