How do adult friendships affect your happiness or mental health?

2025-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

학생이 쓴 원문

I think it was very important thing my happiness and mental health in my life. But, I didn\'t insist well it and get new relationships. I usually felt suffering from having these, because I used to fit my opinion for their feeling. So, I\'m changing my mind to this. A person\'s happiness and mental health is not related with other person\'s frendship and relationship. If someone have healthy mental, then the good frendship and relationship is following to them naturally. Therefore, I think we need to grow up inner mind and spend time to our real happiness.

강사 첨삭

I think it was very important thing my happiness and mental health in my life.

>> I think my happiness and mental health have been very important in my life.

But, I didn\'t insist well it and get new relationships.
>> However, I didn’t assert myself well and form new relationships.

I usually felt suffering from having these, because I used to fit my opinion for their feeling.
>> I often suffered because I used to adjust my opinions to match others’ feelings.

So, I\'m changing my mind to this.
>> So, I’m changing my mindset.

A person\'s happiness and mental health is not related with other person\'s frendship and relationship.
>> A person’s happiness and mental health are not related to another person’s friendships and relationships.

If someone have healthy mental, then the good frendship and relationship is following to them naturally.
>> If someone has a healthy mind, good friendships and relationships will naturally follow.

Therefore, I think we need to grow up inner mind and spend time to our real happiness.

>> Therefore, I think we need to develop our inner self and spend time on our true happiness.

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