How do i maintain my good mind and body condition?

2019-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I usally do many things when i get stressed. First i look for some hosueworks such as the cleaning and the washing. I become busy for doing them. I couldn\'t think about the problem. Second i do a meditation like a yoga. While i\'m doing this, I look at myself, reflect what i did and try to find the best solution. Even though i did upper two things, there are not positive changes in my mind. At last i visit the church. The problem is beyond the human influence,then i pray for the god and believe that there are reasons for all. As a result I did these three things to control my uncomfortable mind as others have their ways to maintain good minds.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Thank you for this. Having a positive mind is really necessary.
- T. Beth
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I usally do many things when i get stressed.
>>> I usually do many things when I get stressed.   
First i look for some hosueworks such as the cleaning and the washing. 
>>> First, I look for some house works such as cleaning and washing something.    
I become busy for doing them. 
>>>  correct  
I couldn\'t think about the problem.
>>>  correct  
Second i do a meditation like a yoga. 
>>> Second, I do meditation like yoga.    
While i\'m doing this, I look at myself, reflect what i did and try to find the best solution.
>>> While I\'m doing this, I look at myself, reflect on what I did and try to find the best solution.   
Even though i did upper two things, there are not positive changes in my mind.  At last i visit the church.
>>>  Even though I did those two things mentioned above and there are no positive changes in my mind, I visit the church.   
The problem is beyond the human influence,then i pray for the god and believe that there are reasons for all.
>>>   If the problem is beyond human\'s control, I pray to God and believe that there are reasons for all. 
As a result I did these three things to control my uncomfortable mind as others have their ways to maintain good minds.
>>>  As a conclusion, I do these three things to control my uncomfortable mind as others have their ways to maintain a good mind.

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