How do we stop young children from looking at Internet sites that have inappropriate content?
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It’s almost impossible for parents to stop their children from looking at inappropriate contents on the Internet since the current advanced technology makes them easily access the sexually explicit materials through internet or smart phones whenever and wherever they want to. It is so controversial over the ways of restricting children from accessing such contents. Many countries, civic groups and households have adopted many methods to protect children from inundated harmful obscene materials. Some governments enforce the regulation that blocks the internet access for children during certain hours. In Korea, some law makers have proposed a bill in which on-line game companies cannot operate after midnight to the next morning, aiming to protect children from game addiction. Some parents have the computer in the living room rather than in their children’s rooms, so children cannot watch porn or games. Smart phones are also another means of accessing the contents.
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Good day Sir [이름]!
I appreciate that you shared your opinions about this topic.
It is really impossible but hopefully the ways you mentioned below will be helpful.
With the advancing technology, we can\'t kids in using the internet.
We just have to guide them whenever they access it. ^_^
I hope that you are having a great weekend.
Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina
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>> OR: It\'s almost impossible for parents to stop their children from looking at inappropriate contents on the Internet. It is because of the current advanced technology that makes them easily access sexually explicit materials, through the internet or smart phones whenever and wherever they want to.
It is so controversial over the ways of restricting children from accessing such contents.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: The ways of restricting children from accessing such contents are really controversial these days.
Many countries, civic groups and households have adopted many methods to protect children from inundated harmful obscene materials.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Many countries, civic groups and households have adopted various ways to protect children from inundated harmful obscene materials.
Some governments enforce the regulation that blocks the internet access for children during certain hours.
>> CORRECT!
In Korea, some law makers have proposed a bill in which on-line game companies cannot operate after midnight to the next morning, aiming to protect children from game addiction.
>> CORRECT!
Some parents have the computer in the living room rather than in their children’s rooms, so children cannot watch porn or games.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Some parents have the computer in the living room rather than in their children’s rooms, so that they cannot watch porn or games.
Smart phones are also another means of accessing the contents.
>> Smart phones are also another means of accessing such contents.
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