How do you avoid stress and negative thoughts? Share your answer in a short paragraph.
학생이 쓴 원문
I usually avoid stress and negative thought by refreshing myself. I tried to do my hobbies that I really enjoy. I usually dance and exercise really hard. While dancing, I have to focus on every motion, so I cannot think about any other worries and problems I have. If I feel stressed about irritating patients, or feel bad about any situation in hospital, I always make sure to dance and try to forget annoying things.
I try to forget the stressful situations intentionally by thinking that it is too bad to waste my time by focusing on stress and negative thoughts. Since I usually work a lot and do not have much time to rest, I consciously try to spend my resting time meaningfully and pleasantly. Mostly, such stress and negative thoughts do not get solved by just thinking about them. I always think like this and try to spend my time valuably, which makes me avoid the stress and negative thoughts consequently.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Relieving yourself from stress is a must. At your young age, with your work and responsibilities, there are so many expectations from you and you have to keep yourself energized and highly motivated. You get tired and overwhelmed sometimes, thus, taking care of your mental health is one thing, you have to be keen about.
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I usually avoid stress and negative thought by refreshing myself.
>> Correct!
Or: thoughts
I tried to do my hobbies that I really enjoy.
>> I try to do my hobbies that I really enjoy.
I usually dance and exercise really hard.
>> Correct!
While dancing, I have to focus on every motion, so I cannot think about any other worries and problems I have.
>> Correct!
If I feel stressed about irritating patients, or feel bad about any situation in hospital, I always make sure to dance and try to forget annoying things.
>> Correct!
OR: If I feel stressed about irritating patients, or feel bad about any situation in the hospital, I always make sure to dance and try to forget about the annoying things.
I try to forget the stressful situations intentionally by thinking that it is too bad to waste my time by focusing on stress and negative thoughts.
>> Correct!
Since I usually work a lot and do not have much time to rest, I consciously try to spend my resting time meaningfully and pleasantly.
>> Correct!
Mostly, such stress and negative thoughts do not get solved by just thinking about them.
>> Correct!
I always think like this and try to spend my time valuably, which makes me avoid the stress and negative thoughts consequently.
>> Correct!
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