How do you balance your time for leisure and work?

2022-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jhozel

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It\'s not easy to make balance between leisure and work. From time to time I try to take a walk around my house. When walking I see people, street or trees. That time is important to me, because walking makes me refresh. After walking, I return to my work.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!
Thank you for writing your composition! ^^
-T.Jhozel

It\'s not easy to make balance between leisure and work.
>>Correct!
From time to time I try to take a walk around my house.
>> Correct!
>> OR: 
I try to take walks around my house on occasion.
When walking I see people, street or trees. 
>> While walking, I find a lot of people, streets, and trees.
That time is important to me, because walking makes me refresh. 
>> That time is important to me because walking allows me to recharge.
After walking, I return to my work.
>> Correct!


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