How do you celebrate New Year’s Day in your country?
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How do you celebrate New Year’s Day in your country?
Korean spend New Year’s Day twice.
>>Koreans spend the New Year’s Day twice.
One thing is the first day of modern calendar, and the other day is originated by lunar calendar that has been used further.
>>The first one is based on the first day according to the modern calendar, and the second has its origin from the lunar calendar that has been used by some for a long time.
Focusing on worldwide New Year’s Day, the biggest ceremony would be tolling bells.
>>When focusing on the worldwide New Year’s Day, the biggest ceremony would be the ringing of bells.
At the midnight, as a second hand points the time of new year, people who are picked as citizen representatives toll huge bells, which are located on main streets, for 33 times.
>>At midnight, as the second hand points to the time of the approaching new year, the people - who were picked as the citizen representatives - will ring huge bells, which are located on the main streets for 33 times.
They had used to let people know the open and close of castle gates, but nowadays, this is only a chance we use it.
>>They used to let people know when they are opening and closing the gates around the castle, but nowadays, this is the only day we have a chance to use it.
Many people go there to watch this ceremony with their family or a significant other to wish their peace and happiness in coming days.
>>Many people go there to watch this ceremony with their families or their significant others, to wish them peace and happiness in the coming days.
We can also watch this occasion on TV.
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or>>We can also see the event on TV.
Some people welcome this day differently.
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or>>A number of people see this day on a different angle.
During dawn, they go to mountains or beaches where they can see sun rising from the horizon.
>>At dawn, they go to the mountains or beaches where they can watch the sun rising from the horizon.
If you want to go to the most famous beach of this scenery in Korea, you should be on board a train at midnight.
>>If you want to go to the most famous beach with this kind of scenery in Korea, you should be on board a train at midnight.
That is why I haven’t been there so far.
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or>>This is the reason why I haven’t been to the place so far.
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