How do you celebrate your birthday?
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I actually have birthday plan. In Korea, the government is opening a festival called Pho Pho Festival. So my friend Debbie and I are going to meet on saturday. But in saturday, in the morning, I have a 2 hour class. That class ends at about 3:20 p.m.. So Debbie is visiting at 3:30 p.m.. Then after we pack, we are going to Pho Pho Festival. We will do lots of activities there and will return at about 7 o\\\'clock p.m.. Finally, we\\\'re going to eat some chhocolate cake and make ublock (ubleck). After that, we\\\'re going to say goodbye, of course. But still, I can\\\'t wait for this saturday! Wish me luck, please!
P.S. How to make ublock :
1) Get the ingedients ; a large bowl, cornstarch, food coloring, warm water
2) Mix cornstarch with water in the big bowl.
3) Put food coloring in it.
4) Mix it untill it is a gooey mixture.
5) If you punch the mixture it will be stone-hard, but if you touch it tenderly, it will feel like liquid. Have fun!
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Hello Kristine! Thank you for your effort in describing your birthday plans as well as for giving me tips on to make ublock. I really appreciate it. I will see you in class.~ T. Lyn
I actually have birthday plan.
>>I actually have birthday plans.
In Korea, the government is opening a festival called Pho Pho Festival.
>>Correct. In Korea, the government will conduct a festival called \"Pho Pho Festival.\"
So my friend Debbie and I are going to meet on saturday.
>>So my friend, Debbie, and I will meet on Saturday.
But in saturday, in the morning, I have a 2 hour class.
>>I will have a 2-hour class on Saturday morning.
That class ends at about 3:20 p.m..
>>My class will end at 3:20 P.M.
So Debbie is visiting at 3:30 p.m..
>>So Debbi will visit me at 3:30 P.M.
Then after we pack, we are going to Pho Pho Festival.
>>Correct.
We will do lots of activities there and will return at about 7 o\\\'clock p.m..
>>We will do a lot of activities there and will return home at 7 o\'clock in the evening.
Finally, we\\\'re going to eat some chhocolate cake and make ublock (ubleck).
>>Finally, we are going to eat some chocolate cake and make ublock.
After that, we\\\'re going to say goodbye, of course.
>>We will say goodbye to each other after.
But still, I can\\\'t wait for this saturday!
>>I can\'t wait for this Saturday to come.
>>I can\'t wait for this Saturday to come.
Wish me luck, please!
>>Correct.
P.S. How to make ublock :
P.S. How to make ublock :
>>Correct.
1) Get the ingedients ; a large bowl, cornstarch, food coloring, warm water
1) Get the ingedients ; a large bowl, cornstarch, food coloring, warm water
>>First, get the ingredients such as large bowl, cornstarch, food coloring, and warm water.
2) Mix cornstarch with water in the big bowl.
2) Mix cornstarch with water in the big bowl.
>>Correct.
3) Put food coloring in it.
3) Put food coloring in it.
>>Correct.
4) Mix it untill it is a gooey mixture.
4) Mix it untill it is a gooey mixture.
>>Mix them until the mixture becomes gooey.
5) If you punch the mixture it will be stone-hard, but if you touch it tenderly, it will feel like liquid.
5) If you punch the mixture it will be stone-hard, but if you touch it tenderly, it will feel like liquid.
>>If you mold or punch the mixture, it will be stone-hard, however, if you touch it tenderly, it will feel like liquid.
Have fun!
>>Correct.
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