How do you deal with your family affair?

2021-01-19 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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When I deal with my family affair, I try to be as honest as possible. My family is the people who I can turn on whenever I have hard time. Lies call lies. If I have something to hide and lie to my family, then I will have to lie more after. When every member of our family become honest then we can talk something that we didn\'t talk usually. Although our family use to talk a lot, there are things that we have to talk seriously. For me, something related to my school or friends are the things that I cannot talk easily. When I tell to my family about these topics seriously, my parents give me a piece of advice and sympathize with me. Piece of advice that they give me as adults help me a lot because it contains wisdom. I also can understand how my parents feel, too. My parents always seemed like a superhero that can go through any hardship. However, after having a family affair, I realized that they are the same human beings like me, so I shouldn\'t give all the responsibility to them.

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I am so fortunate to have a responsible student doing her homework every day! Keep it up, [이름]hee! -Faith-
When I deal with my family affair, I try to be as honest as possible. 
>> CORRECT
My family is the people who I can turn on whenever I have hard time. 
>> My family is the people who I can turn to whenever I have hard time. 
Lies call lies.
>> Lies call for another lies.
If I have something to hide and lie to my family, then I will have to lie more after. 
>> CORRECT
When every member of our family become honest then we can talk something that we didn\'t talk usually. 
>> When every member of our family becomes honest, then we can talk about something that we don\'t talk usually. 
Although our family use to talk a lot, there are things that we have to talk seriously.
>> Although our family is used to talk a lot, there are things that we have to talk seriously.
 For me, something related to my school or friends are the things that I cannot talk easily. 
>> CORRECT
OR: For me, school or friend related topics are hard to talk about.
When I tell to my family about these topics seriously, my parents give me a piece of advice and sympathize with me.
>> When I tell my family about these topics seriously, my parents give me a piece of advice and sympathize with me.
Piece of advice that they give me as adults help me a lot because it contains wisdom. 
>> The piece of advice that they give me as adults helps me a lot because it contains wisdom. 
I also can understand how my parents feel, too. 
>> I also can understand how my parents feel. 
My parents always seemed like a superhero that can go through any hardship. 
>> Before, my parents always seemed like a superhero that could go through any hardship. 
However, after having a family affair, I realized that they are the same human beings like me, so I shouldn\'t give all the responsibility to them.
>> However, after having a family affair, I realized that they are human beings like me, so I shouldn\'t give all the responsibility to them.

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