How do you define success?
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I guess successful life means a life we can content. And for that, we need money for survival, good relationships and health and we need to live life that we think is right. I heard that good relationship is crucial for happiness and health is important to enjoy life well. Also if we live life that we feel wrong it will be hard to feel content. The reason people think of much money and high social status first when we talk about success is they are easy to measure and compare. It\'s easy to think \"The reason I don\'t feel content is I don\'t have enough money and social status. I will be content if I have that much money and high social status.\" But I think that the real meaning of success is a life that we can content.
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I believe our definition of success varies with age... But the last line in your composition is absolutely right...
Chammy
I guess successful life means a life we can content.
And for that, we need money for survival, good relationships and health and we need to live life that we think is right.
>>Correct
I heard that good relationship is crucial for happiness and health is important to enjoy life well.
>>I heard that a good relationship is crucial for happiness and health to enjoy life well.
Also if we live life that we feel wrong it will be hard to feel content.
>>Also, if we live a life that feels wrong, it will be hard to feel content.
The reason people think of much money and high social status first when we talk about success is they are easy to measure and compare.
>>The reason why people often link success with wealth and high social status is because these factors are easily measured and compared.
It\'s easy to think \"The reason I don\'t feel content is I don\'t have enough money and social status. I will be content if I have that much money and high social status.\" But I think that the real meaning of success is a life that we can content.
>>Correct
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