How do you feel about animals despite having an allergy?

2025-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lia

학생이 쓴 원문

I like pets at home very much. Especially, I like dogs. When I was young, maybe 5 or 6 years old, I had dogs in my house. It was in middle school that I knew I was allergic to animals, dust, and peaches. Since then, I have not raised my pets at home. Mr. [Name], a dental technician, goes to the countryside every weekend. There is an old house with a large yard in the countryside, but no one lives there now. A dog there lives alone. It was a stray dog, but Mr. [Name] is raising it. The dog\'s name is Sundae and he is over 10 years old, but sometimes Mr. [Name] goes in two weeks. At that time, Mr. [Name]\'s older sister who lives nearby sometimes comes to feed him. I really enjoy talking to Mr. [Name] about Sundae. Dogs are just as good at expressing what they like and dislike as humans.

강사 첨삭

Hello David. Your writing is detailed and engaging! I made a few adjustments for smoother phrasing and clarity while keeping your original meaning. Your descriptions make it easy to visualize the story of Sundae and Mr. [Name]. Keep up the great work!

~ T. Lia

I like pets at home very much.
>> I really like having pets at home.

Especially, I like dogs.
>> I especially like dogs.

When I was young, maybe 5 or 6 years old, I had dogs in my house.
>> When I was around 5 or 6 years old, I had dogs at home.

It was in middle school that I knew I was allergic to animals, dust, and peaches.
>> I found out I was allergic to animals, dust, and peaches when I was in middle school.

Since then, I have not raised my pets at home.
>> Since then, I have not had pets at home.

Mr. [Name], a dental technician, goes to the countryside every weekend.
>> CORRECT

There is an old house with a large yard in the countryside, but no one lives there now.
>> CORRECT

A dog there lives alone.
>> A dog lives there alone.

It was a stray dog, but Mr. [Name] is raising it.
>> It was a stray dog, but Mr. [Name] has taken care of it.

The dog\'s name is Sundae and he is over 10 years old, but sometimes Mr. [Name] goes in two weeks.
>> The dog\'s name is Sundae, and he is over 10 years old. However, sometimes Mr. [Name] can only visit every two weeks.

At that time, Mr. [Name]\'s older sister who lives nearby sometimes comes to feed him.
>> During those times, Mr. [Name]\'s older sister, who lives nearby, sometimes comes to feed him.

I really enjoy talking to Mr. [Name] about Sundae.
>> I really enjoy talking to Mr. [Name] about Sundae.

Dogs are just as good at expressing what they like and dislike as humans.
>> CORRECT

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