How do you feel about President Moon Jae-in considering a pardon for jailed ex-President Park Geun-h

2021-07-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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I feel quite different for both. I feel negative about a pardon for Park Geun-hye and positive for Lee Jae-yong. Park is politician and what she have done could\'ve occured a national disaster. A pardon for her doesn\'t make any benefit either to a country or citizen. Lee\'s case needs to be treated different but it shouldn\'t be a special treatment. Samsung is not just a company but have an huge influence on a country. They holds an important position politically, economically and diplomatically. Under the current situation, South Korea is struggle to recover its economy and the world focus on dominating in a semi-conduct industry. A pardon for Lee can lead to better situation so that public opinion has a generous attitude relatively. Whether a pardon will be done or not, it have to be done in consideration of national welfare and emotion. The important thing is it shouldn\'t be shown like they have a privilege.

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I feel quite different for both.
>>correct
I feel negative about a pardon for Park Geun-hye and positive for Lee Jae-yong.
>>correct
Park is politician and what she have done could\'ve occured a national disaster.
>>Park is a politician, and what she has done could\'ve occurred a national disaster.
A pardon for her doesn\'t make any benefit either to a country or citizen.
>> A pardon for her doesn\'t make any benefit either to our country or its\' citizens.
Lee\'s case needs to be treated different but it shouldn\'t be a special treatment.
>>Lee\'s case needs to be treated differently, but it shouldn\'t be a special treatment.
Samsung is not just a company but have an huge influence on a country.
>>Samsung is not just a company but has a huge influence on our country.
They holds an important position politically, economically and diplomatically.
>>He holds an important position politically, economically, and diplomatically.
Under the current situation, South Korea is struggle to recover its economy and the world focus on dominating in a semi-conduct industry.
>>Under the current situation, South Korea is struggling to recover its economy, and the world focuses on dominating the semiconductor industry.
A pardon for Lee can lead to better situation so that public opinion has a generous attitude relatively.
>>A pardon for Lee can lead to a better situation so that public opinion has a generous attitude relatively.
Whether a pardon will be done or not, it have to be done in consideration of national welfare and emotion.
>>Whether a pardon will be done or not, it has to be done in consideration of the national welfare and emotion.
The important thing is, it shouldn\'t be shown like they have a privilege.
>>correct
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