How do you feel about spending time in your car during rush hour?
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It is painful to stay in the car during rush hour. Less than one hour-drive is okay to me. However, it usually takes me one and half hours or more when I come back home from my office due to the heavy traffic. When I drive to work in the morning, it is okay because I leave my house so early like before 6:30 so that I can avoid traffic jam. The traffic congestion in big cities is getting more serious. I feel dizzy behind the wheel when a vehicle is crawling. I had numerous cases of almost hitting the vehicle ahead. It is waste of time to be stuck in traffic. I feel exhausted and completely drained after driving such a long time at a low speed. Driving long hours at high speed is okay and less stressful than driving the same hours at low speed. I often listen to radio while commuting by car, however, I cannot enjoy it when it takes more than an hour. Another problem I often suffer from while driving at rush hours is pain in my back. To avoid all of them, I often take a subway.
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It is painful to stay in the car during rush hour.
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Less than one hour-drive is okay to me.
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However, it usually takes me one and half hours or more when I come back home from my office due to the heavy traffic.
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>> Better: However, it usually takes one and a half hours or more when I go home from my office by car due to the heavy traffic.
When I drive to work in the morning, it is okay because I leave my house so early like before 6:30 so that I can avoid traffic jam.
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The traffic congestion in big cities is getting more serious.
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I feel dizzy behind the wheel when a vehicle is crawling.
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I had numerous cases of almost hitting the vehicle ahead.
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It is waste of time to be stuck in traffic.
>> Better: It is a waste of time to be stuck in traffic.
I feel exhausted and completely drained after driving such a long time at a low speed.
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Driving long hours at high speed is okay and less stressful than driving the same hours at low speed.
>> Better: Driving long hours at high speed is okay and less stressful than driving the same hours at a low speed.
I often listen to radio while commuting by car, however, I cannot enjoy it when it takes more than an hour.
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Another problem I often suffer from while driving at rush hours is pain in my back.
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>> OR: Another problem that I often suffer when driving during rush hour is my back pain.
To avoid all of them, I often take a subway.
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>> OR: To avoid all of them, I often take the subway.
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