How do you feel after finishing all that cleaning?

2025-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Lia

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I haven\'t finished cleaning my room yet. I\'m going to finish everything on the weekend. But how would I feel when I\'m done cleaning? There is a reason why I clean the room and reposition the furniture or order the bookshelf to put on my desk like today. I work to change my environment if my thoughts and actions do not move in the direction of development and do not think creatively. I thought this was the time for this work. Of course, I\'ll feel refreshed, and I think creative ideas will come out of my head to move in a better direction.

강사 첨삭

Hi David! Your writing expresses a strong sense of self-awareness and motivation! You did a great job conveying your thoughts about how cleaning impacts your mindset. I made a few small adjustments for clarity and natural flow, but your ideas are well-structured. Keep up the great work! 

~ T. Lia

I haven\'t finished cleaning my room yet.
>> CORRECT

I\'m going to finish everything on the weekend.
>> CORRECT

But how would I feel when I\'m done cleaning?
>> CORRECT

There is a reason why I clean the room and reposition the furniture or order the bookshelf to put on my desk like today.
>> There is a reason why I clean my room, reposition the furniture, and organize the bookshelf to place on my desk, like I did today.

I work to change my environment if my thoughts and actions do not move in the direction of development and do not think creatively.
>> I change my environment when my thoughts and actions do not align with growth or creativity.

I thought this was the time for this work.
>> I felt that now was the right time for this task.

Of course, I\'ll feel refreshed, and I think creative ideas will come out of my head to move in a better direction.
>> Of course, I\'ll feel refreshed, and I believe creative ideas will flow, helping me move in a better direction.

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