How do you feel when you see someone is not following the values you were brought up with?

2015-05-21 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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My parents valued independency. They were not always on my back asking me where I was going and how long I would be there, but they still cared about my safety very much. They have never nagged at me about studying because they’ve believed me. I have tried hard not to betray their trust. My parents were both honest, sincere, and never did their neighbors harm. They worked so hard. They were both loving and caring people who gave me reason to respect myself and others. Although they didn’t go to college, they were kind, polite, and always remained calm. What I learned from my parents, are valuable lessons in life. What I don’t understand and endure are the people who are rude, bad-mannered, and not respect others. They speak loudly in a public place or throw away a cigarette but out of their cars while driving. We are all well educated and cultivated people. We should keep basic etiquette in our daily lives no matter what your social position is. Respect and care are basic values.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!

Yahoo! One more day to go!

I am excited to have a long weekend. hbihihihi.

What are your plans?
Anyway, you are right, we should always respect other people.

What we show others are the things we learned from our parents.

So if we are a bad person, it reflects that our parents didn\'t teach us good manners.

Let us hope that kids will always remember the good things they learn at home and in school until they grow up.

Talk to you in class.

Teacher Nina


My parents valued independency.

>> correct

They were not always on my back asking me where I was going and how long I would be there, but they still cared about my safety very much.

>> They were not always at my back asking me where I was going and how long I would be there, but they still cared about my safety.
>> OR: 
They were not always at my back asking me things, but they really cared about my safety.

They have never nagged at me about studying because they’ve believed me.

>> They have never nagged me about studying because they’ve believed in me.

I have tried hard not to betray their trust.

>> correct

>> OR: I tried hard not to destroy their trust.

My parents were both honest, sincere, and never did their neighbors harm.

>> correct

>> My parents were both honest, sincere, and never did any harm to their neighbors.

They worked so hard.

>> correct

They were both loving and caring people who gave me reason to respect myself and others.

>> correct

Although they didn’t go to college, they were kind, polite, and always remained calm. 

>> correct

>> OR: Although they didn’t go to college, they were kind, polite, and always calm.

What I learned from my parents, are valuable lessons in life.

>> correct

What I don’t understand and endure are the people who are rude, bad-mannered, and not respect others.

>> What I don’t understand and endure are the people who are rude, bad-mannered, and don\'t respect others.

They speak loudly in a public place or throw away a cigarette but out of their cars while driving.

>> They speak loudly in a public place or throw away a cigarette butt out of their cars while driving.

We are all well educated and cultivated people.

>> correct

We should keep basic etiquette in our daily lives no matter what your social position is.

>> correct

Respect and care are basic values.

>> Better: Respect and care are the basic values.

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