How do you keep yourself updated?

2024-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Julia

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As always, working at the company is very hard. So when i finish my work, I\'m feeling tired. When we work at the company, I think we get a stress is essential. I need a something to do for deleate my stress. Reading book made me more tired and Playing internet game was very exciting. But after the game, I always had a headache. I tried a lot of things, Among them, My best thing is running exercise. It\'s makes me refreshing and feeling light. I always running exercise in the gym at 22:00, while 30minute every day. Since i started a Power English class, I go to the gym after the English class.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! Thank you so much for doing your homework. You did a wonderful job. Please take note of the corrections I made on your sentences. Keep it up and see you in class! ^^
-T. Julia
As always, working at the company is very hard.
>> Correct
So when i finish my work, I\'m feeling tired.
>> When I finish my work, I feel tired.
When we work at the company, I think we get a stress is essential.
>> When we work at the company, I think getting stress is essential.
I need a something to do for deleate my stress.
>> I need something to do to relieve my stress.
Reading book made me more tired and Playing internet game was very exciting. But after the game, I always had a headache.
>> Reading books made me more tired, and playing internet games was very exciting. But after the game, I always had a headache.
I tried a lot of things, Among them, My best thing is running exercise.
>> I tried a lot of things. Among them, the best thing for me is running exercise.
It\'s makes me refreshing and feeling light. I always running exercise in the gym at 22:00, while 30minute every day.
>> It makes me feel refreshed and light. I always do running exercises in the gym at 22:00, for 30 minutes every day.
Since I started a Power English class, I go to the gym after the English class.
>> Correct

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